Acrostic

[lepoussinvengeur]

Well, in French it is an acrostic but unfortunately, in English, it doesn't mean anything...

So I translated my little poem... not the one I worked on most but I like the spontaneous way I wrote it. It's one of the most personal thing I've ever written I think...

Sorry for the quality of the translation... I had to change some little things to make it maybe nicer... but I didn't work a lot on that translation... ^^"
I made some choices so you're warned, these are not necessarily mistakes from a French poet x)


I decided to post the original version (in any case... if you're curious)


La froideur de tes regards est comme le noir de la nuit,
Il fait si frais et si sombre dehors,
La Gelée a envahi le monde et entre dans mes os,
Il y a toujours cette impression de répétition…
A présent, je me demande ce que nous deviendrons,
Nul ne peut le savoir, pas même les Anges.

Un seul de tes mots pourrait briser l’enchantement
N’y a-t-il rien que tu puisses me dire ?
Dis-moi dès maintenant ce que tu attends du monde
Et je ferai de mon mieux pour répondre à ton aspiration.
Rien qu’une seule fois, laisse-moi essayer…


Approximate translation :

Coldness of your eyes is like Night’s blackness,
Outside, everything is so dark and cold,
Frost has invaded the world and is infiltrating my bones,
And there’s always that feeling of repetition…
Now, I am wondering what we will become,
No one knows, not even Angels.

Any of your words could break the spell,
Won’t you tell me anything ?
Tell me now what you’re expecting from the world
And I will do my best to meet your expectations.
Just one time, let me try.

[kwjw88]

Thanks so much for sharing...
Really appreciate you posting such a personal piece of work here
The content is really good, wish I could understand French so I could read it the way it was meant to be read, hmmmm

Can imagine how you must have felt while writing this though...

[lepoussinvengeur]

Thanks for reading it x)

(and I guess I didn't write anything about joy and spring... I used to write when I was sad, I guess that's the case of a majority of writers...)

[kwjw88]

Originally Posted by lepoussinvengeur

Thanks for reading it x)

(and I guess I didn't write anything about joy and spring... I used to write when I was sad, I guess that's the case of a majority of writers...)

Well...won't say most writers, but a lot of them do, especially those who don't have the pressure of having their salaries depending on it But yeah, writing is a form of stress relief and it helps people get through depression, making them feel somewhat better having poured out their emotions into words...

Really wish more people would do the same here though. Nice to hear works of others and hearing people commenting on your stuff

[lepoussinvengeur]

Yup, I meant most amateur writers...

I guess we all have different reasons to write, and then to share our stuff...
But some people do not really care about that stuff, we can't blame them xD

If I'm in a good mood and that I write, I will write in prose (I don't know if I can say it in English, but I'm too lazy to grab my dictionary... ^^')... I have lots of ideas but I do not finish or even begin. God I'd like to write again but I have no courage to face my work. * coward xD *

Well... I think I talk too much lol

[kwjw88]

Lol...yeah, that's true...
Haha, that's okay. Don't push yourself, you can just write when you feel you've got enough emotional energy to spare, I'm the same...lol

I don't think you talk too much. Am quite grateful you're spending this much time here Thank you!

[sudden_xxx]

It's ok not too bad

[sudden_xxx]

what are you in essence trying to say

[sudden_xxx]

do you agree that's a good poem

[kunde_rotairo]

e... acrostics e.