Story Contest for Vesdwar the Dwarf (Ended)

[etherkye]

well when you finshed send me a draft

[ScoutBot]

But its more of a story on the dwarves as a whole I think maybe it could be more into Vesdwar..

[CrimsonShadow]

the point of it was to give a general background of the race for those who aren't full of fantasy knowledge, and to explain some about vesdwar, but to still leave the players character to his own imagination... I could work on it though.

[Trithalol]

quote- Miners all they spent their entire lives either mining, fighting, or working ....

doesnt make sense O_o .. i mean i know what your talking about .. ^^ .. it sounds like you started a sentence and forgot what you put in teh beginning of it .. =p .. lol i duno how to explain it .. the syntax is wrong i guess... lol .. just read it and you can tell ..

[CrimsonShadow]

yeah I see it... thanks trith

[dreadood]

i didn't see much story's yet. but i cant write

[professorchaos]

Vesdwar was a powerful leader, the most powerful the world had ever seen. He dominated his enamys using his powerful defence. The enamy would attack and attack but only make themselfs tired, then Vesdwar, and his fellow dwarfs would strike. The dwarfs took control of city by city, all thanks to there great leader Vesdwar. After each victory they would hail there god saying this chant.
thankyou lord for we have won
thank you lord for the setting sun
thank you lord, but the war has yet begun.
The dwarfs would go home and make love to there wifes, for they feared the evil Orcs would kill them in there sleep. On a shinning day Vesdwar desided to attack the evil Orcs and finish them off. They rode at sunrise, and fought for hours. As the sun was setting it looked like the dwarfs would loose. Vesdwar fought hard aggainst the Orc leader, but was stabbed in the gut. Thanks to the great armor of the Dwarfs Vesdwar was mearly wounded and killed the Orc leader. The dwarfs came home the next morning, as Vesdwar carried the Orcs leaders head. He placed it on a stake and yelled along with his whole kingdome.
thank you lord we have won
thank you lord for the setting sun
thank you lord our quest is done

[professorchaos]

Ya i dont think its that good. Im not used to writing short storys, i wrtie poems or 3-200 page storys. one paragraph is hard

[skylight]

Winner: CrimsonShadow - Q$100 on the way


Q$20 on the way for the following participants

BamBam
Trithalol
PrinceDestruction
professorchaos